W.A.L.T use correct paragraphs.
Phew the millenium falcon flies past as chewbacca screamed wahoo. Suddenly a bunch of Thai fighter ships fly past beew neeew as they fire. Han Solo shoots at the ships and blows them up. Suddenly all they see is a big black star.
Han Solo says there's a place to land so they fly into the big black star. Back in planet naboo the clone troopers are after chewbaccaa. One clone trooper says look some tracks the suddenly one says oh a penny. Back on death star the mellenium falcon blows up end of story.
Is each paragraph about one thing? So many different things are happening in the first paragraph, whats your main idea? Mrs Larsen
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